HW Classmates Haiku



Clap next to a trap
taking a nap on the lap
slap him with the strap

I like this Haiku Yun wrote becuase I can hear his voice in my head. This poem is something I can definitely see Yun write. The rhyme scheme is carried throughout the entire poem, which I liked. All together I count 6 rhymes which is a lot compared to some other classmates work.


My revision

Clap next to a trap
A city that is dangerous
Slap him with the strap

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